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Thanks for the review, Howard. I've incorporated all of these suggestions into the -16 draft.
Roger
>>> Howard Chu <hyc@highlandsun.com> 09/22/05 3:09 pm >>>
Section 7 1st paragraph, 5th line
s/the the/the/
Also this paragraph is a little ambiguous, it might be better as
An LDAP client may use the unauthenticated authentication mechanism
of the simple Bind choice to establish an anonymous authorization
state by sending a Bind request with a name value (a distinguished
name in LDAP string form [LDAPDN]) of non-zero length, ...
Otherwise it implies that a sequence of two names be provided.
2nd paragraph, 1st line
s/not used in/not used/
The same ambiguity about name values appears in Section 8 paragraph 1.
Section 9.2 2nd paragraph "with the same sasl" [mechanism] "sasl" should
be "SASL"
In general, capitalization of terms (like bind vs Bind) appears very
inconsistent; it becomes a distraction when reading the document.
The 3rd paragraph
LDAP servers use the serverSaslCreds field, an OCTET STRING,
in a BindResponse message to transmit each challenge.
...
LDAP clients use the credentials field, an OCTET STRING, in
the SaslCredentials sequence ...
Same complaint as for section 7 & 8, would prefer:
LDAP servers use the serverSaslCreds field (an OCTET STRING)
in a BindResponse message ...
6th paragraph s/client t/client to/
Kurt D. Zeilenga wrote:
> The WGLC will now close on Tuesday, 27 September 2005.
> It is hoped that this extension will allow for additional
> review and comment. If you haven't commented already,
> please take some time in the next few days to do so.
>
> Thanks, Kurt
>
> At 10:27 AM 9/19/2005, Kurt D. Zeilenga wrote:
>> Please note this WGLC closes this Thursday! Please review
>> and comment (and if you have no comments, drop a note to
>> chairs so).
>>
>> -- Kurt
>>
>> At 01:10 PM 9/6/2005, Kurt D. Zeilenga wrote:
>>> This message initiates a LDAPBIS Working Group Last Call on the
>>> document:
>>>
>>> Title: LDAP: Authentication Methods and
>>> Connection Level Security Mechanisms
>>> Editor: R. Harrison
>>> Filename: draft-ietf-ldapbis-authmeth-15.txt
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-- Howard Chu
Chief Architect, Symas Corp. http://www.symas.com
Director, Highland Sun http://highlandsun.com/hyc
OpenLDAP Core Team http://www.openldap.org/project/
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