Re: Wording of Authorization deefinition (was Re: protocol-27 comments #3)

["Jim Sermersheim" <jimse@novell.com>]

ok, new text is:

The process of authorization may, among other things, consider
authentication information obtained during the bind operation, and/or
other acts of authentication (such as lower layer security services).

Jim

>>> Hallvard B Furuseth <h.b.furuseth@usit.uio.no> 11/9/04 6:32:32 AM
>>>
Jim Sermersheim writes:
> Is this less or more confusing?
> The process of authorization may consider (among other things),
> authentication information obtained during the bind operation,
and/or
> may consider other acts of authentication (such as lower layer
security
> services).

Less confusing, less neat. I would
s/consider (among other things)/among other things consider/
s/may consider other acts/other acts/.
Or keep the original text, but with s/takes as input/may consider/.

Though now that I see how the original text should be read, I'm not
sure
I want to argue it is confusing. I'm quite capable of confusing myself
without help from the draft.

-- 
Hallvard